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Some people prefer to live in hot climates. Whereas others love the lifestyles in countries with cold climate. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #climates #love #lifestyles #countries #climate
There are two types of views
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 when we are talking about climate. One
prefer
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 hot
weather
 and another enjoy cold and snowing. Do their debates have any sense? Let’s discuss it from two points of view.
First
, we will talk about sunny areas
such
 as Africa or Australia.
Second
, we will compare it with cold lands,
for
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 north Russia or Finland. So let me start whit the statement that
people
 in
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hot countries are happier than
people
 who always live in northern areas. It has been mentioned in the BBC journal in March 2020. As
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 nations spend more time under the sun, they take a lot of vitamin D.
As a result
, it helps them to be much more patient and joyful.
Finally
, sunny
weather
 is always better, than rainy and cloudy. Sun helps our organism to produce serotonin and
that is
 why
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 in Africa and other hot regions is so happy.
However
,
people
 in Finland are called the happiest nation in the world. Why does it happen?
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 they are getting used to
this
weather
 or they really enjoy it. Snow gives them an opportunity to ski or
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 for a walk to the beautiful white forest and those little things make them really into their climate. To summarize,
people
 can take pleasure in both types of temperature. As for me, I am really a sucker for warm sunny
weather
, so I prefer south states to live in. I want everybody to enjoy their homeland whether it is summery or not.
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