Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The huge development of urban areas attracts people.
Therefore
, the big cities
are getting overpopulated causing inadequacy of shelter in urban cities
. This
can pose some serious social effects. It is of popular opinion that only the government can provide solutions to this
issue and I completely agree with the statement.
Some people may claim that the population can control the housing shortage. They may refer to these situations like
that which will warrant individuals, to Change preposition
as
sought
jobs with better-earning capacity. As a result, they can afford the high housing fees Wrong verb form
seek
and
they can live more comfortably, and they can avoid being victims of social circumstances.
I believe Correct word choice
apply
this
argument does not stand up to scrutiny, as it is only logical that only the government can create means to improve housing condition
. Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
To begin
, the state can facilitate décongestion of the urban centres by prioritizing the rural area development. As a result
, the rate at which people immigrate to the big cities
will be slowed down, also
there can be emigration from big cities
to the
small towns. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, the
Tribune Newsline, a well-known news website reported the population decline in Kumasi, a well-developed city in Ghana that occurred in the year 2010- 2015. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
of industries and construction
of better roads in smaller Correct article usage
the construction
cities
. Furthermore
, the government can affect laws against real estate agencies from charging the inhabitants exorbitantly. In effect, it can limit some negative situations as
sexual abuse, and increased crime Correct quantifier usage
such as
rate
in Fix the agreement mistake
rates
the
society.
In conclusion, I believe that Correct article usage
apply
although
some others may disagree with the notion, I opine that only the state has the capacity to tackle the sheltering issue through the betterment of rural areas and put a stop to overpricing
of houses by real-estate dealers. Correct article usage
the overpricing
Hence
, it can help avoid some negative social implications.Submitted by Oludiran Tijesulola
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