Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The huge development of urban areas attracts people.

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, the big

cities

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are getting overpopulated causing inadequacy of shelter in urban

cities

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can pose some serious social effects. It is of popular opinion that only the government can provide solutions to

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issue and I completely agree with the statement. Some people may claim that the population can control the housing shortage. They may refer to these situations

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that which will warrant individuals, to

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jobs with better-earning capacity. As a result, they can afford the high housing fees

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they can live more comfortably, and they can avoid being victims of social circumstances. I believe

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argument does not stand up to scrutiny, as it is only logical that only the government can create means to improve housing

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, the state can facilitate décongestion of the urban centres by prioritizing the rural area development.

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, the rate at which people immigrate to the big

cities

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will be slowed down,

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there can be emigration from big

cities

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small towns.

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Tribune Newsline, a well-known news website reported the population decline in Kumasi, a well-developed city in Ghana that occurred in the year 2010- 2015.

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of industries and

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of better roads in smaller

cities

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, the government can affect laws against real estate agencies from charging the inhabitants exorbitantly. In effect, it can limit some negative situations

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sexual abuse, and increased crime

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society. In conclusion, I believe that

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some others may disagree with the notion, I opine that only the state has the capacity to tackle the sheltering issue through the betterment of rural areas and put a stop to

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the overpricing

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of houses by real-estate dealers.

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, it can help avoid some negative social implications.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

304 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

affordable housing
urban planning
policies
funding
private sector
community organizations
public-private partnerships
innovative solutions
market demands
financially viable
socioeconomic factors
income inequality
migration
urbanization
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Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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