Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Adolescence is believed by a growing number of
people
to be the happiest period for most
people
during their lifetime.Others ,
however
,argue that
people
live a happier life in their adulthood
eventhough
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even though
they have more responsibilities. On the one hand,a group of
people
think most
of
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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live a happier life in
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with other periods in their
lives
because in that period they are neither too young to be dependent
to
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other
people
nor old enough to
unertake
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undertake
responsibilities.
In other words
, it is the only
time
that
people
could only think about themselves and spend enough
time
on leisure activities without being concerned about making money, meeting their basic necessities and other responsibilities related to adulthood.take
an
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dolescent
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adolescent
as an example, he can independently
spends
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his
time
on dating his friends and have fun with them while no one
expect
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him to contribute to any serious activities ,
such
as cooking and paying bills.
On the other hand
,it said by some others that those who are
adult
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can be more content with their
lives
in spite of greater duties they have since they are not affected by the rush of hormones which are released in teenagers’ bodies. To clarify more, human aged between 12 and 18 are undertaken serious changes ranging from mental changes and physical ones ,which can have
adverse
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impact on their sense of satisfaction and happiness in life.
In addition
,as
people
grow older,they can be more experienced and know themselves better which can lead them to find the exact definition of happiness.In
the
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other word,older
people
can find or create ways in which they are able to live
a happier
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a happier life
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lives
by developing their knowledge about
lives
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their lives
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and
also
themselves. In conclusion,I
belive
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believe
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that
although
adolescence is a period of
time
in which teenagers do not need to take part in carrying out any difficult tasks, adulthood is when
people
can experience much more amount of happiness due to maturity and a great deal of knowledge and experience that
people
have.
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