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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
While some countries do not have free educational systems, and others do, it is unquestionable the importance of
this
matter
 since it directly impacts the future of society.
However
, it has been debated by experts for a very long time whether it should be free of charge for those attending or not.
This
 essay will shed light on the
matter
, explaining why
education
 should be free as a means to increase equality, as well as explore if it is really as expensive as many think, due to the economic benefits it brings in the future. To start,
lets
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 explore why a free
education
 equates to a more
egualitarian
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egalitarian
 society. It is known that many countries,
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 those still in development, have a huge amount of population that struggle to make ends meet every day, and
thus
 have no money to send their kids to university and maybe even to more fundamental levels of school. By being allowed access to free and public educational facilities, these
families
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reality only reachable by people with more money,
thus
 increasing equality. Another important argument relating to
this
matter
,
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 is that
education
 is
a
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key to help
families
 leave poverty. There are so many examples of
families
 in Brazil that sent
kinds
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 to public schools and universities, only to see them later get a great job and start helping out their
families
. The arguments presented above already outline a strong
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 position, but
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 explore now how free
education
 might not be as capital intensive for
government
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 as it
initially
 seems. Several studies conducted by top prestigious universities around the world have stated that a strong educational system directly correlates to a strong Gross Domestic Product. As an example, South Korea was a very poor country a few decades ago, and by deciding to invest heavily in
education
 they completely changed their economy for the better and are considered now a very prosperous nation. Along with a stronger GDP, something else that comes along is innovation. By allowing free access to
education
, a country starts to have more people studying and conducting research in universities,
thus
 bringing innovation in all sorts of fields of study and giving the nation a competitive advantage over others. The discussion surrounding
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 and will continue to be very relevant as society keeps progressing.
Also
,
although
this
 topic is very extensive and certainly there are much more complexities regarding implementing a policy
such
 as
this
, the matters presented here should certainly be taken into account during a decision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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