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Smoking is a habit that claims many lives and is a great drain on health service. One way to combat smoking would be to make it illegal. What are the pros and cons of such a government policy? What alternative strategies can you suggest to combat smoking?

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Many humans lost their lives each and every year because of smoking cigarette.To eliminate
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 pattern.The government can put a
ban
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 on the sale of cigarette.So people have to leave smoking if they do not get supply.So in the following paragraphs,I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 policy and find out other ways to come off
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 smoking tendency.
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 with,many individuals assume that if
government
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the government
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 implement the
ban
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 on
smoke
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.Consumption of taboo will be zero but we cannot ignore the drawbacks of that policy.Many folks who
smoke
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 in routine will suffer from many health problems like,body pain,laziness,depression,or many more.Even some of them will commit suicide because
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 not possible to quit straightway a long time habit.
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,some human being will adopt other more dangerous drugs
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 as alcohol,or medical drugs that can make society worse.I believe that the administrations should follow other ways to control usages of smoking.One of the precise notions is to spread awareness among the community.They should
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explain
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 them if they will
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 they can suffer many chronic diseases.
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, totally make illegal smoking strategy may work. If the smoking product will not available in the market how persons can buy it
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 they have to quit their bad habit.For ,example some countries put a
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 on alcohol so today they are fully
alcohol free
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 countries.
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 ,to reduce the sale of
smoke
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 they should
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 impose a
ban
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 on that
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 who encourage people toward smoking. In conclusion,it is a very bad habit and many people are the victim of it, it does not matter what way we use but we have to eradicate
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 issue from our community.
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