Grandparents take care of the children when their parents are out at work. What are the advantages and possible disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, an increased number of both fathers and mothers are employed and spend a great deal of their day at work,
this
has made concerns over the
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and care of their
children
.
However
,
grandparents
are taking
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role
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caring for the kids. Despite the fact that
this
has numerous advantages,
nevertheless
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it is
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with drawbacks as well.
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and mothers have dramatically reduced financial costs of
parents
.
In other words
, they have
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role in alleviating the cost of childcare
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and
this
has made it possible for
parents
to save larger sums of earned money.
In addition
to
this
, leaving
children
with
grandparents
rather than having a babysitter, relieves a lot of stress and anxiety on the
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of
parents
. They feel their babies are more secure and are in safe hands.
For example
in a study done by a group of psychologists in Japan, mothers who left their baby with their
grandparents
were much more psychologically healthier and had
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anxiety disorders and panic attacks.
However
,
this
is only one side of the issue.
On the other hand
,
children
who are left with their
grandparents
are at risk in two ways.
First
,
grandparents
tend to
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and become lenient towards the child resulting in making the child obstinate and indisciplined.
Secondly
, If
grandparents
are too old, they can not handle and rescue
children
in any case of emergency.
For instance
, Back in time, my brother was left with my grandmother, because my mom was teaching at school and my dad was at work.
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, he burned his feet with boiling water and due to her poor vision, she could not take him to hospital. In conclusion,
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parents
who keep an eye on
children
,
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can be
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helpful in relieving financial and
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psychological

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burden of
parents
.
However
,
this
can lead to indisciplined
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or might pose risk to the child's life.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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