In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to epidemiologists and experts of the field, overpopulation seems inevitable issue in the future, which may have numerous implications on the society, including
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for huge expenditure on
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As a result
, it is often believed that the public should be responsible for their
healthcare
costs
. Personally, I agree with
this
view to some extent and think that some
people
should pay for their care while
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of some others should be covered by
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First
of all,
people
who practice bad habits and follow
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lifestyle should be obliged to fund their hospital and treatment
costs
.
In other words
, those who ignore scientifically proven facts and doctor’s recommendations need to pay for their actions,
for
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living a sedentary lifestyle, eating diets that pose risk
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health, or keeping bad habits like cigarette smoking, all
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contribute to chronic illnesses are nonsense
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. To sum up,
people
who keep
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pattern of life despite knowing
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of their certain
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must pay out of their pockets when becoming ill.
On the other hand
, governments shall cover
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costs
of
people
with unavoidable diseases.
That is
to say, a
healthcare
program shall be responsible for covering
people
who are old age, have a certain genetic disease in the family tree or develop a spontaneous illness without modifiable risk factors.
For example
, Benign Prostatic Hyperplasia (BPH) is a disease of men
that is
very hard to avoid, it disturbs patient’s quality of life and needs continuous treatment, sometimes it may even require surgery. All these are costly and hard to afford by
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that is
why developing policies and rules to cover these
costs
are governments responsibility. In conclusion, Governments in order to effectively handle budget in a future
that is
expected to witness a rapid growth of population
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shall develop a plan to cover
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of illnesses, one that includes unpredictable diseases, at the same time excludes diseases
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of unhealthy human
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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