You have just read an article in an international magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine: Correct the information in the magazine Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am a regular reader of your travel magazine “The Wanders”. I would like to draw your immediate attention
towards
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the article that was published in your
last
edition January 2020 under the name explore- Holy
city
Amritsar. There are few details about my
city
which are not accurate as published in your magazine.
Firstly
, Amritsar airport has direct connectivity to various countries
such
as Dubai, London, Canada and many more. So, it has now become
hassle free
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for the tourists to reach the destination.
Secondly
,
Golden
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temple is not the only tourist place in
this
city
. There are many other tourists attraction and most of them
has
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a direct link to the history of Punjab. Now it has become easier to learn about the heritage and culture of Punjab by merely visiting these places
such
as Sada Pind, Haveli and Gobindgarh Fort. These erroneous facts may confuse the readers of your esteemed magazine and may affect the number of visitors planning to visit the Holy
City
. So, I would like to request you to kindly re-print the article with the correct details in your
next
edition. Yours faithfully,
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