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“Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

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Introduction
in
huge
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a huge
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 world , diseases occur
that is
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common
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a common
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 way and
it's happen
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 anytime anywhere. so it is better to prevent
begein
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begin
 that start. today technology is very high advantages
then
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 treatment price
is automatically raise
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.
i
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 shall put
my
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 forth my arguments to support my views.
Body paragraph 1
in the
fisrt
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first
 , we should avoid jug food and eat less
oilly
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oily
 food
such
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 as street
snackes
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snacks
snakes
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secondly
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 we are away from anyone
suffer
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suffering
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 from any kind
od
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of
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 diseases
for instance
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 one person have suffer from
cold
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the cold
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 that time we should do
altimately
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ultimately
 distance between two
person
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people
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.
Body paragraph 2
moreover
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 , we should do
regularly
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regular
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 exercise and yoga to keep
healhtly
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healthy
 and feet . some other people do meditation
that is
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
 for body and they keep away from dangerous diseases.
Body paragraph 3
thirdly
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, some people
reguraly
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regularly
 maintain their health and they
does
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rutain
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retain
routine
check up
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 once in
month
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. so they are previously known . we should daily hand wash after coming outside and daily take
healhtly
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healthy
 food .
Conclusion
to put it in
nutshall
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nutshell
,
i
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I
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 pen down saying that people daily maintain your life with their busy
scheduls
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schedules
schedule
 and once
time
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a time
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 we should do their body
check up
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checkup
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 so they can easily cure their body before
occur
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occurring
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 big
insidance
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inside
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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