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It is a fact that people are under a lot of pressure and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue?

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Stress is a natural reaction of our body to external influence.
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 can be noise, conflict at work, at home, with everyone and so on.
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, psychologists claimed that it`s one of the serious problems in the XI century. In our daily life, we`re only working and we don`t pay attention to other things like our hobby, time with family, friends and chilling. In my opinion, it`s vital in our digital world, we should add more positive moments.
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 any negative attitude, because every day we are faced with negative emotions, so you can`t distinguish real threat and when a situation seems dangerous, the brain reacts
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 it as a big risk. How can we solve it? It`s not so difficult as we think, the problem is only lack of our free time because we don`t relax or enjoy,
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 playing any kind of games enables you to make own virtual world.
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, you will create your world, where you can do anything that you want. So It will lighten the mood and shift attention from reality. Eventually, stress is not so difficult problem. We just forget about our relax-time and I recommend all of you to think only positively to avoid any problem.
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