Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that
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should teach
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how to be a good member of society while others believe that
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provide a better opportunity to learn
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.In my opinion,
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personally think that both
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and
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are essential to teaching
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as well .
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with,most
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nowadays have full access to go to
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where they gain new knowledge every day. As we know,our world nowadays is full of accommodation of technology included internet,
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in
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generation are likely to get bad influences from internet and impressed by some violence or action movie ,
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,
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kind of influencers can change their behaviour and cause problems in teaching.To illustrate,some people think that
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will hold the responsibility on
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's conduct in
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however
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teachers are busy with preparing lesson and teaching for the class that's why they cannot make sure everyone is well-behaved.
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are thought to be strict and firm,every student has their own personalities so it is hard to tell who will be a good member of society,the only thing we can do to improve their character is shaping their mind on those bad habits they are thought to seem normal.
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,
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are busy with their task in the company every day
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the
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will lack caring and become more mischievous.
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working the whole day is tough but
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should spend more time from their off-hours on their kids by having a conversation.
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,the
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will slowly realise what is right or wrong,the point is we must educate them from a young age so that they can develop good habits.
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,we should not just depend on the
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because family is much closer than teachers,so
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' impact has been contributing the most in term of education. In conclusion,
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personally believe that both
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and
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are equally indispensable in shaping the
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's character
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • moral values
  • social norms
  • structured environment
  • cooperation
  • respect
  • communal responsibilities
  • decision-making
  • societal integration
  • consistent messages
  • cultural expectations
  • complementary roles
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