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some people think that public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free to the people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with his statement.

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Public
transport
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 should be free to
general
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 public for their
use
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 and ticket prices should be funded by the authorities. Some
people
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 favour
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 statement whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint. I agree with
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 notion as
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 will help poor
people
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 to
travel
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 and decrease
pollution
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.
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, there are a few poverty-stricken
people
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 who are not able to buy ticket prices and
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 will help them to
travel
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. These
people
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 often avoid
travel
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 owing to lack of money. They walk on their feet to reach their destinations. If
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 facility is free, they will be
on
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 ease and comfort.
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, a recent survey state that twenty out of
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 labours walk daily to their work because they cannot bear the
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 charges.
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,
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 will be really beneficial to poor
people
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 and public
transport
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 should be provided free.
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, free public
transport
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 will alleviate the problem of
air
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pollution
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.
People
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 will be motivated to
travel
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 by buses and trains. They will gradually
use
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 less private automobiles.
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 will result in
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less
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fewer
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 cars on roads and minimum
use
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 of fossil fuels. Fossil fuel is causing
air
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pollution
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. If
this
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 is used at less rate than before,
air
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pollution
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 will decrease.
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, a survey conducted among
people
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 that if they
use
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 private vehicles after
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public
transport
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 get free, most of the
people
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 denied.
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, free
transport
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 service will help to improve the
pollution
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 problem. In conclusion,
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 is a wise decision to provide free
transport
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. I completely agree with
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 as
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 will help
people
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 who cannot buy tickets to commute.
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 will
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 curb the problem of
air
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pollution
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 as free
transport
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 will encourage
people
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 to
use
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 public buses and trains in place of private automobiles.
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