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Some people believe that technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantages for workers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In the
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 few decades, technological innovations have dramatically changed the way of life and work. While some people believe that
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 trend deteriorates the workforce environment, I would argue that it has eased the existence of workers and increased their productivity. On the one hand, technology has overtaken a lot of manual and communication jobs, which were earlier carried out by human personals. And with the advent of Artificial Intelligence, a lot of careers are on their way to becoming replaced.
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, in the short time workers are able to lose their trade and stay without money to exist.
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, the car-producing company Tesla has created the unmanned vehicle program which leads to the disappearance of
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 a profession as a car driver. In fact, a great number of taxi and bus drivers will be replaced by Artificial Intelligence.
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, these innovations can have a destructive effect on people’s lives as they cannot predict and,
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, prevent unexpected situations.
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, high-tech devices may help employees to make their tasks easier, involving technologies which can carry out dangerous and difficult work. A good illustration for
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 is that modern devices analyze obstacles with the electricity lines and, nowadays, people have not put their being to risk.
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, factories have enhanced their efficiency and employees working process more streamlined with minimum chances of error. Eventually, all of these updates make job accessible and safe for society. In conclusion,
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 the contribution of modern inventions has significant effects on the worker's environment, it
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 has efficient workplace benefits.
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