The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.
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The pie charts compare the
proportion
of the working population in manufacturing,
sales
and services in 1960 and 2010 in two
towns
.
Overall
, the percentage of the workforce in manufacturing increased in both
towns
in 2010 compared with the 1960 figures.
By contrast
, in
Towns
A and
B
, the
proportion
of those working in the
sales
sector fell in 2010. In 1960, the figure for workers in manufacturing was 29% in
Town
A, almost three times higher than the figure in
Town
B
.
However
, by 2010 the
proportion
of people in manufacturing had risen in
Towns
A and
B
to 64% and 25%, respectively.
On the other hand
, the figures for the
sales
sector witnessed a decline. In
Town
A, the
proportion
of the workforce in
sales
in 1960 was 41% and
this
fell by over half to 20% in 2010. In
Town
B
, the figure decreased from 70% in 1960 to 53% in 2010. The percentage of workers in the services sector almost halved in
Town
A to 16% in 2010,
whereas
in
Town
B
it rose slightly from 20% in 1960 to 22% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, sales, towns, b, town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominant sector
  • proportion
  • employment sectors
  • distribution
  • shifts
  • trends
  • growth
  • decline
  • main sector
  • 50-year period
  • comparison focus
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • changes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • evolution
  • observed
  • highlight
  • underlie
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