Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the consumption of
goods
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is reflecting the increase of power of advertising but not the demand for
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of society in which they are sold. I partly agree with
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statement because
people
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are becoming unconscious about what they want to buy. On one hand, the essential product is always the
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choice in other options.
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of all, to have a convenient life,
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good
products
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are required to get a happy life.
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instance
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the manager always needs a clean suit for the meeting or the house is needed to decorate on ceremony day. The
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, the necessary
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are the
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helps to the
consumer
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because they usually see the benefit of the product when they extremely need it.
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, some
people
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do not see all of the qualities of
products
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so they easily were forgotten by the
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.
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, a lot of
consumer
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does think about the function of
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when they buy it.
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, many
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just want to buy
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after watching the advertisement
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these.
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Furthermore
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those
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were bought
beacasue
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because
they have a beautiful outlook, even some
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are useless for their life.
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, the advertising company always have a good strategy for their
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those are easy to access the
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not only on the TV
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and the social media and the billboards. In conclusion, recently
people
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just buy
products
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when found that have a good look or a poor understanding of
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. The media company will take these advantages to ear more money from the
consumer
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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