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The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools How far do you agree with this prediction?

#internet #course #books #schools #prediction
The rote of learning modify these days , schools involved new technology and
internet
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the internet
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 in their syllabus to help in their
education
 . I totally disagree if they used it completely
instead
 of the
course book
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coursebook
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 and curriculum . The approach that the
internet
 gave it to us in
many
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any
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aspect
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 of
live
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 especially in
education
 may have
negative
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 effect if we employ it against us ,
such
 as many teachers rely on
internet
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 to get the information and encourage pupils to synthesis source without supervision , it
make
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 them confused and misleading of information ,
this
 may be
effect
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affect
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 their academic achievement.
In
addition
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 the communication skill that the student may achieve it from group work and interaction with the class
instead
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self-
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self-study
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study
 .
Furthermore
, we can not deny the benefit of distance learning and
internet
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 that bring it to a lot of people in their higher
education
study
 when they decided to
study
 in
another countries
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another country
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 with
this
 facility make them eager to continue
education
 .and use it as a supplement to assimilate knowledge they have it from
teacher led
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 lessons . Overall the schools should include
the
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technology in their rote of learning under their supervision
this
 can improve the way of
study
 and increase the source of information that the children may have
it
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,and make it an integral part of
syllabus
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the syllabus
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 , guided them to use it in
good
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 way .
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