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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the speed of the modern
life style
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, people have resorted to
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convenience
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foods
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 in
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recent years. While some people consider that the consumptions of
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foods
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has
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 some
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, others think
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 harmful. In my opinion, I think the drawbacks of
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foods
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 outweigh the
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 as I will explain in
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 essay. Admittedly, there are advantages pertaining to
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convenience
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foods
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.
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, it is easy to prepare and saves
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 for those
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who
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 a busy life.
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, college students who live in dorms
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 heavily on
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 kind of
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 because they do not have the
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 to cook a meal and they rather prefer a meal that takes less
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 to prepare so they can have enough
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 to study.
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,
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foods
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 are considered cheap compared to homemade
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.
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, homemade
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 require purchasing the ingredients separately, whereas
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foods
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 are mostly pre-cooked meals.
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, despite the advantages above, I believe that readymade
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 can bring about more harm than
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. One problem is that it can cause health problems.
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, canned
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 contains preservatives that are the main contributory
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 cancer.
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 to that, the high level of sugar that some of
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 type of
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contain
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 may cause obesity, especially
children
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in children
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 and
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 can result in diabetes in the long run. In conclusion, despite the merits associated with
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 trend, I think the health problems caused by the consumption of
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food
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 are detrimental to the human body and outweigh any
benefits
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