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There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason.

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People
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 can be motivated to stay at the same
job
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by
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 many reasons and it is thought by some that salary is the
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main
mainest
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 factor.
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 essay disagrees with the opinion that money is the prevailing reason to work for the same
company
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 because many organizations usually pay the same salary for
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similar
job
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 positions, and the culture of
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company
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the company
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 is far more important than monetary considerations. It does not make sense to claim that money is the primary reason why
people
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 stay with the same
company
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 because for any
job
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 there are a number of different corporations that offer you the same salaries. It can be easily
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demonstrated
 by looking in
employment
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 section of any newspaper or web-site where
people
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 may find
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hundreds
 of similar vacancies with almost the same salaries.
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, according to
recruting
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recruiting
 web-site HeadHunter, more than 15 business consulting corporations in Moscow are looking for 5-year experienced managers and all pay 50,000-60,000 dollars per year.
Corporate
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The corporate
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 culture of the
company
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 is proved to be much more important for employees and may respond to their own philosophy.
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, some workplaces are very relaxed and make an emphasis on
work-life
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the work-life
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 balance of workers, while others are more focused on
performance
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the performance
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 and work effectiveness of personnel.
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, a recent Cambridge University survey has found that more than 60% of consulting
speciasilts
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specialists
 have left their
job
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possitions
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 due to brutal working hours and intense
preassure
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pressure
 from the part of more senior colleagues. In conclusion,
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 essay disagrees that wages are the most important consideration when remaining at the same
ocuppation
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occupation
 for a long time because
people
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 are more likely to get paid more or less the same in different companies, and corporate culture is
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a far
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 more relevant concern.
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