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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both views

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It is considered by some that dedicated their whole life to working in a particular organization is good, while there are others who think that they can change their working place
time
 to
time
 for their bright future.
However
, In my opinion, I believe that there are certain aspects to be considered rather than the working period. On the one hand, spending their all the working period in an organization would build up a person more confidently.
In other words
, since an employee has been working in a particular field for a very long
time
, he can more engage with other colleagues, the working environment, and all the tasks, and
also
this
 will lead to feeling like a home. One clear example is that the long-term working staff can be more responsible and resourceful in all tasks as he is being more confident and courageous than others.
Thus
,
this
 event leads to getting more rewards.
On the other hand
, changing workplaces could keep a person more enthusiastic.
Hence
, working in the same place over a certain period may bring boredom in routine tasks as well as the same surroundings again and again. If the person spends a certain
time
,
then
 he would make many friends and
also
 learn new things to let him keep self-motivated.
Consequently
, the motivation aids to get away from the workaholic pressure. To conclude, all in all, in my view, it all depends on the person’s mindset about how would they feel working in the same environment for a longer
time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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