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With a growing population many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. what are the advantages and the disadvantages of doing this.

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Recently there has been a
noticable
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noticeable
 rise in population. It is thought that genetically modified
crops
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 should be increased. In
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 I shall explain the possible positive and negative impacts of
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one
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 hand,
production
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the production
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 of more genetically modified
foods
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 results in many advantages.
one
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 of which is increasing the rate of agriculture outcome.
this
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 is because genetic engineering aims to come up with
crops
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 which are more productive and with
longer
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a longer
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 life span.
Accordigly
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, main cereals like wheat, corn and rice
anre
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are
 expected to fill the needs of
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nowaday
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 elevated population.
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, vegetables which used to rotten in
few
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a few
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 hours or days are now modified to
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 for
one
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 to two weeks, so they can bare being shipped to far places without being damaged.
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, original tomatoes used to rotten from two to four days maximum, but they were treated to sunrise for over two weeks recently.
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the country’s economy.
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, using genetically modified
foods
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 may have some drawbacks.
One
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 disadvantage is that it causes dangerous diseases. To illustrate, as scientists change the characters of natural vegetables and fruits, they,
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definitely
, use
chemical
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 substance which eventually affects our health causing dreadful sicknesses
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 as cancer.
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, according to
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research conducted by the
Fuclty
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Faculty
 of Agriculture at Zagazig University in which 5000 volunteers who consume GM
foods
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 participated in the research, about 10% of the participants developed different
concerous
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cancerous
 diseases. Another disadvantage is that
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 the industry of producing organic natural
crops
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 would recede. Due to the almost impossible competition between them and the productions with cheap prices
compaired
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compared
 with organic
crops
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.
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,
investers
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investors
 who own
farm lands
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farmlands
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which
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that
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 plant organic
foods
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 may lose their jobs affecting the country economy negatively. To conclude, more GM
foods
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 result in many advantages as increasing food production and quality, while they may have many disadvantages as affecting our health and vanishing
organic
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the organic
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 food industry.

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