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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 has seen
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 change in the
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tourism
 sector with
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 pattern of people changing to
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 extent and exploring least explored
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.
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 I agree, that in future more people will opt to go on holidays in their own country as compared to foreign destinations. As per reports laid down by various
travel
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 companies and data published by AAI on the passenger movement of domestic
travel
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 destinations and bookings has seen 25% growth in
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 of
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 16 months with many
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 time travellers too visiting tourist
places
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 on holidays.
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 a change in preference is due to
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 factors depicts global outlook on
travel
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.
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 and foremost, many
tourist
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are
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 now opting for mini gateways which
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 within 500 Kms and less than 8 hours drive wherein they don’t have to opt for
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week long
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 leave from their work.
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 increase in traffic is observed in hotel and homestays along with taxi booking and short air
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 routes as per reports furnished by NHAI and
Tourism
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 ministry of India. Another reason is
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 budget constraint which has forced consumers to reach out to
places
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 in their home country as travelling abroad has become a costly affair not only in term of air ticket booking but
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 lodging and foreign exchange as per International
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 Authority.
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 from my own personal experience due to
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 in digital information reach attractions in domestic destinations have zoomed up due to
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 of
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vloggers
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 and
youtubers
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YouTubers
 who are creating awareness about uninhibited
places
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 which are serene and tranquil far away from commercial sites. I myself explored Chiplun in Maharashtra because of
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 blog.
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Lastly
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 another justification for
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 in inland tourism in
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 in India is because of the fact many consumers are now understanding the benefits of taking
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 and enjoying time with friends and family which gives them
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 break from
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the busy
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 schedule and rejuvenate their mind and body from usual busy life and these new travellers prefer local
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 considering
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 of time and money.
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 due to
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 reasons I strongly feel there will be
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 in locals visiting domestic
places
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 compared to foreign trips.
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