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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or to work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People are debating whether learning a foreign
language
 has another benefit other than finding your way in a different country.
This
 essay will discuss the return of learning a
second
language
 not only for travelling and working but for increasing cognitive functions.
Firstly
, discussing
language
 as a medium. And
secondly
, what is the effect of learning another
language
. Since humans landed on earth, the matter of sharing ideas was important. As you can see the drawing inside old caves, documenting what our ancestors were doing. In the modern ,world we have a lot of languages with their own grammar system. So people tend to learn another tongue to be able to speak to different people.
However
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 lately learning a new
language
 became popular as finding job opportunity became easier if you are not only speaking in your mother tongue with the open market to hire. Tourism encouraged visitors to learn the
language
 of the destination country to get the most out of the experience. The invention of languages was for communication. But ,
,
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lately
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 with the advancement of neural science, we were able to discover a much greater effect of becoming bi-lingual.
For example
 one of the uncovering was the part
that is
 responsible for math
skills
 is the same part as our
language
skills
 and by learning another tongue you increase your math
skills
 by proxy. Overall learning another
language
 increases almost every aspect of our brain functions. In conclusion, a
second
language
 is important for communication but
also
 improves our cognitive
skills
. Which not only lead to a better communicator but
also
 a skill dealing with numbers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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