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Some peole think that parents should read or tell stories to their children. Others think parents needn't do that as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Never before has the public been so concerned about early-age education. Some people argue that the involvement of
parents
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 in story-reading is necessary while the rest believe that
children
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 benefit more from gathering information on their own. From my perspective,
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 the guidance from family to form a reading habit is indispensable, it is more beneficial to read independently. Without doubts,
parents
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 play a significant role in the early development of
children
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. Generally speaking, story-telling empowers
children
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 to become curious. By listening to fairy tales from
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,
children
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 can learn about nature and history. They would
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 generate various questions about the society that they are living in from these tales, which helps to develop their creativity. Another point worth mentioning is that it takes time and efforts for
children
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 to be mature enough to read the storybooks or to understand the contents from the TV show,
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 the supports from family at an early stage become more important. Despite the difficulty for
children
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 to acquire information from books and TVs directly at an early age, it is still indispensable to develop their learning skills.
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 of all, reading independently is the best opportunity to form a reading habit for
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, and their reading and writing skills can be trained during their self-reading.
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, only listening to stories may ultimately lead to over-reliance on
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, and it is detrimental to their future study in school.
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, stories from
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 are prone to be limited to their own knowledge, while tremendous helpful and fresh information,
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 as stories that can trigger
children
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’s interests in math, can be found in books, which contributes to a more balanced development for the youngsters. To put everything into consideration
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 supports from
parents
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 in story-telling promote creativity and curiosity for
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 at
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 age.
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, not only does independent reading contributes to the writing and reading skills of
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, but
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 it enables them to get access to a wider range of knowledge, which leads to more balanced development.
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