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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting on is very important for people.Why might this is the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is crucial and
one
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 of the most significant parts of
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's life is to have a shed on his head. Keeping that in view, a permanent shelter would be the most vital option. I think it is essential to have a
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 of your own rather than
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rented accommodation. In
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 essay, I will discuss some of the reasons to justify my stand.
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 with, a hefty amount is given to the landlords if living in someone else's
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. That amount could be paid as instalments if
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 takes a home loan to construct his own
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.
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, it
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 poses some restrictions while residing in a
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 that we do not own.
One
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 may not feel the freedom of living as per their own way.
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,
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 may have to change
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 due to many unforeseen circumstances which can be very hectic. A self-owned
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 can prevent you to encounter
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 a problem in life, especially when you have grown old.
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,
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 should have home security during growing age or when
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 is retired and does not have a source of income anymore. In conclusion, it is of utmost importance to have a permanent
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 rather than living in a rented
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 due to the factors discussed above.
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 can have a sense of satisfaction that the
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 owner won't knock on your door for payment.
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