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Prison is the best way to punish criminals. Give your opinion.

#prison #criminals
These days, we are made to meet several kinds of crimes whenever watching televisions and reading newspapers. In
such
 a situation, some people support that cells are the best place for
offenders
 to punish them. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 statement and in
this
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First
 of all, the main reason is that the punishments should be decided case by case. Specifically, in terms of petty
offenders
,
such
 as theft and vandalism, they are not suitable to be sent to
jail
 rubbing shoulders with other murderers and violent criminals. Alternatively, soft options like community service may be the more proper verdict for those petty
offenders
.
On the other hand
, some serious criminals, like serial killers, who are harmful to society should be sentenced to capital punishments.
Furthermore
, my
second
 reason is that contemporary
jail
 is too luxurious to give
offenders
 reasonable penalties.
For instance
, inmates are allowed to watch televisions, read magazines and play sports, which is more like a summer camp
instead
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jail
.
This
 is totally the waste of our taxes, so
offenders
 should be made to live in a poorer way to pay for their faults.
Nevertheless
, it is not saying that prison is not eligible for punishing
offenders
.
On the contrary
, cells can help with rehabilitating the prisoners by educating and training them while serving a sentence.
As a result
, some inmates will not re-offend after releasing back into the community if they are able to make a living on their own.
However
,
this
 does not fit in every case. In conclusion,
although
 it seems common sense to put
offenders
 in
jail
, I think it is not the best method to punish them because it is not suitable for the majority of cases. Personally speaking, prison should be the
last
 choice while other ways are failed.
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