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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

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In recent years there
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 been an increase in the number of
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 flights.
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 is due to the reduction in prices for these trips, some quarters argue that
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 trend has more advantages, while others have contrasting opinions.
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 these views will be analyzed before an opinion is given. On one hand, the primary advantage that discounted
air
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 ticket provides is that it enables
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, regardless of social status, travel to attend events or meetings.
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, in ,Canada there has been
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increase
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 in the number of flights that go in and out
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 city, mostly for official purposes.
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, leading to improved productivity in workplaces.
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, there is an increase in revenue generation due to tickets being available to anyone at a low cost.
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, the noise pollution created by aeroplanes can be a menace to the immediate environment.
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people
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 of
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 community wrote a petition to the Virgin Atlantic airline concerning the disturbance it endures, particularly during the descent of a flight.
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, engineers from Presto are already developing noiseless
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machineryair
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machinery air
 machinery that will produce very reduced sounds during its operation. In my opinion, the reduction of
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 travel costs poses more benefits, because it helps citizens to save money, and
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 contributes to profits accrued for airlines. To conclude, when
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 transportation is provided to
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 at a good discount it ensures there is improved efficiency in companies, and
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 helps
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 to save money, that could
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 be used for other aspects of life
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 as Education and Feeding
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