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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world.
 What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

#stress #countries #world #factors #society
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 stress has been
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 problem.
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 it. To start with
youngstars
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 are under tremendous pressure under the current education system. consider an example of
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 student who was preparing for competitive exams. parents are demanding for good rank from him to enter into IIT's,NIT's etc.. . maybe he
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 of a
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 person who was suffering to get money for the daily needs
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 their family. because he works daily to get money for the needs
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. total people are depending on
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 person , which is making him
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feel so much pressure. he
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 know what to do , what has to be done to overcome all the problems. in conclusion , all the family members and parents need to support their members
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 to achieve their goals in life. because they play a major role in their life.
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment
  • financial instability
  • social safety nets
  • constant connectivity
  • work-life balance
  • remote work
  • social isolation
  • community support
  • chronic illnesses
  • affordable healthcare
  • public health campaigns
  • mental well-being
  • high-stakes testing
  • holistic education
  • flexible working hours
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