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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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There are so many
stores
 which buy
food
 from overseas
such
 as vegetables, canned
food
 and they do not want to take local
food
 so for that there are some benefits and some drawbacks. I will discuss my viewpoints in the
next
 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, As we know that there are so many foods which are
stores
 can take from outside countries rather than the local
food
 industry. Grocery
stores
 like to take their canned
food
 from another country because
this
 different from local
food
 and adults always prefered
this
 kind of
food
 because they are busy with their schedule they do not have time to make meals at home but
this
 is a drawback , they going to forget their traditional
food
 and they have no idea how they can make it. Youngsters always love to eat western
food
such
 as burgers, pasta Meggi spices which are unhealthy for them.
Secondly
, according to me , if grocery
stores
 make their own
food
then
this
 has some positive impacts because
this
 can help to decline unemployment, know that if grocery
stores
 open their own farms and hire workers
then
this
 will good for the people because they can eat fresh
food
 which is good for their health.
Moreover
, a new generation can learn about traditional
food
 and they can forget about western
food
 which is unhealthy for them.
Furthermore
,
stores
 can save their money because they spend too much on imports and exports. In conclusion,I would like to say if they spend money on local
food
 rather than overseas
then
this
 will become more fruitful for the residental.
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