Some people think that the government is responsible for the transportation of children to school. However, others think that it is their parents’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Sometimes
government
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transport pupils to their schools using specialized
school
buses.
This
function is not always provided in schools, so in many
cases
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kids must get to the
school
on their own.
Therefore
, people argue, whether it is
parents’
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part or power must do
this
. It should be discussed from two sides to analyze it. Obviously, it is very convenient for
family
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the family
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, when transportation to the
school
is well organized.
For example
,
mother
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or father should not get up earlier to get their children to the educational establishment and they would not be late for their work. Teenagers learn to plan
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their
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they
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time and become more independent. They already know the exact time to catch the bus, so it is very useful.
This
shows, that transportation to the schools is necessary.
On the other hand
, parents often like to spend more time with kids in the morning
that is
why they want to pick them up with their own transport. It is a good chance to have
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small talk and become closer with
child
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a child
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. But, children usually like to talk with their friends, rather than relative, especially when they are teenagers.
Finally
, they choose
school
buses with friends than boring talks with
mother
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their mother
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. To sum it up, both sides have pros and cons. In my humble opinion,
school
buses are more convenient and interesting, because of friends and independence development.
However
, I believe, that infants should choose the method
or
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transportation by themselves. Of course, parents must control them in
the
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both cases.
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