Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others Disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People nowadays are very particular about their personal
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and like to keep it confidential.
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a growing trend amongst
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to gather personal as well as professional
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about their
employees
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in order to develop
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understanding. Some are of the opinion that the idea of gathering data relating
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employee's marital status, their hobbies etc. by the
employers
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is reasonable and fruitful while others do not confide in
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, some people may find it irrelevant to share their private details with their
employers
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because they might find it as
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invasion
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their
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privacy
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a human nature to be
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secretive
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. People think that the employer must be concerned with their professional performance.
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is, indeed, believed to totally unrelated to their personal traits. Studies show that while filling the employment form workers normally skip filling up the areas requesting personal
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emphasise
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knowing their
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both personal and professional
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. As we know while employing knowing the professional
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background
is critical.
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, understanding their professional
life
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helps to build up a strong relationship.
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conducted on leading 10 companies of
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states that most companies collect confidential data because it helps them to understand their
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better and
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build
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partnership. Business owners
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that they can create better work relationships provided that the
employees
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provide correct data. In conclusion, It is for sure a matter of great trust to give
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access
of personal
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but is
extreemply
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extremely
necessary to have
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a better
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work
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work-life
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life
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balance. In my
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collecting personal
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is
expreemly
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extremely
reasonable provided that the
employers
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keep
this
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information
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safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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