Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others Disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People nowadays are very particular about their personal
information
and like to keep it confidential.
Nevertheless
,
its
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a growing trend amongst
employers
to gather personal as well as professional
information
about their
employees
in order to develop
better
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understanding. Some are of the opinion that the idea of gathering data relating
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employee's marital status, their hobbies etc. by the
employers
is reasonable and fruitful while others do not confide in
this
. I
also
accord with
this
new approach.
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, some people may find it irrelevant to share their private details with their
employers
because they might find it as
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to
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their
privicy
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privacy

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.
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,
its
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a human nature to be
secrative
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about our
life
. People think that the employer must be concerned with their professional performance.
Work
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life
is, indeed, believed to totally unrelated to their personal traits. Studies show that while filling the employment form workers normally skip filling up the areas requesting personal
information
.
Conversely
,
employers
emphasise
on
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knowing their
employees
both personal and professional
information
. As we know while employing knowing the professional
backbround
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is critical.
Likewise
, understanding their professional
life
helps to build up a strong relationship.
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conducted on leading 10 companies of
asia
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states that most companies collect confidential data because it helps them to understand their
employees
better and
hence
build
strong
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partnership. Business owners
claims
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that they can create better work relationships provided that the
employees
provide correct data. In conclusion, It is for sure a matter of great trust to give
ccess
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access

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of personal
information
but is
extreemply
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extremely

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necessary to have
better
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work
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work-life

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life
balance. In my
opinion
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collecting personal
information
is
expreemly
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extremely

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reasonable provided that the
employers
keep
this
information
safe.

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