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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time

#people #children’s #leisure #activities #waste #time
Education is a key part of once life , it
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 up people life as well as it constructs our country's future. Based on
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the individual's
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 point of view, some people believe kid's free
time
activities
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 to be educational, whereas
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others
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 strongly oppose
this
 view. According to
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, It shouldn't be educational. Below are some arguments to support my view. To commence with, children's leisure
time
 is
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 own
time
, so parents should let them decide how they want to spend it. Other than the school
time
 , if offsprings again
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 their free
time
 as an educational activity , it will become
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monotonous
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 task. To
examplify
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, it is often observed that , by doing so ,
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children
childrens
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children
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 are not able to concentrate on any task and
also
, it increases their anxiety level .
In addition
 ,
this
 will gonna impact once social life ,
hence
 they won't be able to
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 with their friends or teammates in any sports
activities
.
Furthermore
 , physical growth is
also
 as important as mental growth. Parents and teachers must
encaurage
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encourage
 children to participate in
such
 kind of
activities
. As a consequence of
this
, their
stemina
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stamina
 increases and
also
 they gonna learn about team spirit which will help them to become a good person of society.For
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example , the world's
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renowned
 and famous companies like
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 and google
also
wants
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 their employees to be
jack
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a jack
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 of all
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.
Moreover
 , they will understand how to handle both success and failure and
appriciate
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appreciate
others
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 efforts. To put it in a nuts shell, it should be up to the children , how they want to use it.
In addition
, it is
also
 parents and teachers
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responsibilities
responsibility
 to help kid's , so they can
understantd
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understand
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the importance
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 of both mental and physical
activities
.
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