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Today, more and more full time university students focus on other activities rather than spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A
university
 offers courses that help
students
 gain knowledge on a particular discipline and prepare them for a career. So it is not surprising that some of them feel
students
 should be devoted to studies. But others argue that it is equally important to take part in other
activities
. I believe that
students
 should acquire overall development. The
university
 should concentrate not only on meeting industry demands but
also
 on helping
students
 be involved in other
activities
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides and explain how taking part in different
activities
 is beneficial to the
students
. A student who limits himself only to academics is a frog in a well. They will be the odd ones out in society at a later point in
time
. Being bookish will not help in any manner.
One
 has to devote
time
 to developing other talents as well. There are innumerous examples of engineering
students
 pursuing careers as a singer, actor or sportsman. Since it is tough to predict the future, there is no need to confine oneself solely to studies. A student passionate about singing may fondly recall his live performances in
university
 than the
time
 spent in the classroom. The live performances would have helped in some manner (
such
 as removing stage fear).
One
 should not join a
university
 for the sole purpose of procuring a career. There are many other facets of
university
 life that
one
 has to sense and appreciate.
For example
, a student taking part in inter-college events like a symposium will gain knowledge, build communication abilities and win more contacts which may help him in becoming successful in an interview and career as well. Devoting
time
 to other
activities
 helps the person acquire overall development, albeit the primary reason to join a
university
 is to study. In conclusion, though it is important to concentrate on studies,
one
 need not get trapped in the classroom. They should make
time
 to pursue other talents beyond the curriculum as well.
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