some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. other believe the amount of time they spent on television influence their behaviour most. discuss the both views and give your opinion.

No doubt
behaviour
represents the personality of an individual assignment of
society
believe that what children watch
influence
them and their
behaviour
while other points that the most amount of time spent on television watching
influence
pupils
behaviour
most I would like to delve both the arguments before upsurging and opinion
To begin
,with
behaviour
is vital for an individual in the
society
peoples watch a
lot
of things happening around them in the house and
Society
all things implement on the
People
's life and they visualise a
lot
of stuff in house like the body language of their parents and how their respect each other and show their love and communicate with each other
pupils
visualised all the things and apply and do an experiment in their own life which affect their life and
behaviour
and
Society
is
also
show both the positive and negative tops which
people
visualised all around them in the
society
such
as road racing crime steps physical activities and all
this
type of visualisation affect
pupils
hence
everything
pupils
visualised around them
influence
their
behaviour
On the other ,hand watching
TV
influence
people
most in both ways positive and negative there are a
lot
of negative effects which affect
people
's
behaviour
like they spend a
lot
of time watching
TV
shows which affect their eyesight cause it takes a
lot
of concentration to watch
TV
and spending a
lot
of timing watching
TV
effect to take no interest in physical activities which affect their health and create health issues
furthermore
there are
also
positive effects like gaining of knowledge by the Science channel and news channels To conclude considering all the points mentioned above it is implicated that the visualisation of staff in
society
and home
influence
pupils
behaviour
and
also
watching
TV
has its benefits and bad effects.
Submitted by naresh on

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