You have been invited to attend an interview for a place studying a course at a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot come at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admission tutor. In your letter • explain your position • apologise and offer to come on another day or later the same day • also ask how long the interview will be, and whether there will be any tests during it You should write at least 150 words.
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Dear Mrs. Collins,
I am a second-grade student at London University and two weeks ago I sent you a request about having art history courses in your group. Unfortunately, the date on which you appoint our meeting conflicts with another event, that I
also
cannot replace.
This
year London University is an ambassador of The European Scientific Conference that will be held on 27th March and I am participating in it on behalf of my faculty. So, I hope you will accept my apologies and change the interview date to any time that would be convenient for you.
Also
, I would be very grateful if you would send me a little bit more information about the format of the interview, especially about if I need to take any tests as part of examination
and how long it might continue.
Yours sincerely,
Kate OswaldAdd an article
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Task Response
Ensure that the letter addresses all parts of the task. You have done well in explaining your situation, apologizing, and requesting a new date, but more emphasis on expressing the inconvenience caused could enhance the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and linking words to create a flow in your writing. While your letter is generally well-structured, consider transitioning more smoothly between ideas for enhanced coherence.
Writing Tone
For a more polite tone, consider using modal verbs (would, could) more consistently when making requests or asking questions.
Task Response
Clarify the connection between your significant commitment (attending the European Scientific Conference) and the impact it has on your availability. This strengthens the rationale for your request.
Logical Structure
To improve the letter's structure, consider organizing your ideas more clearly into paragraphs, dedicating one paragraph for each of the main points (your conflict, apology and alternative arrangement request, and questions about the interview).
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite