Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession, what factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it.

How many university students are forced to choose a profession which is not aligned with the following graduation programme each year? Even though someone could argue that
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any way

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they are not unemployed and have a way to move forward with life, will they be honestly satisfied?
is a huge issue that most current
face every year. One of the main causes
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situation is the outdated courses which are not adjusted according to the current market trends. Because of that, the
will find a massive gap between the university and industry which will affect their capability to perform well. It is common to see that currently ,many companies conduct onboarding sessions and training sessions for fresh
who just joined the company. So, companies have expanded the chosen degree programs for a particular role as anyway they have to train
for it from the beginning. Another reason would be allowing students to get enrolled with the courses without thinking about the actual requirement of the industry.
leads to an overwhelming number of
will be available for
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a few

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opportunities, which will force some of them to find a profession even if it does not directly go along with the speciality.
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Change to a plural noun

The singular countable noun science follows the quantifier Many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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studying students
have to choose different professions due to
reason. Conducting
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realistic research on current market trends in the industry is required to rectify
issue. Graduation programmes need to be adjusted and intake needs to be limited so that
will find more aligned professions with the courses and expectations.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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