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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The question of whether
people
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 are judged by their characteristics or according to their social prestige is a quite debatable topic today. It is considered by some that
people
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 are mostly judged by their wealth and social position, not by their core
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. Both sides will be examined and I will discuss why I disagree with the given statement.
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, ethics and
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 hold great importance in life, both personally and professionally. Nowadays,
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 are being judged by their social status,
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 of their
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 of life.To illustrate, take the Indians
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, they are very religious by nature,
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 they forget their
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 for little gains.
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,
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 are those acts we learn in our childhood from our parents and relatives.
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,it is understandable for other
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's emotions and respecting their culture and lives.
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, no business and profession can progress without trust,
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 and ethics. Without these factors,all your degrees and certificates make no sense, if you do not know how to respect other
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.
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, good ethics and
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 depict your country, culture and heritage.
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,it builds up a higher reputation for a country.
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, there are celebrities that are judged by their material belongings and their social dignity.
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 happens as some want to take advantage of their well-off acquaintance.
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, Paris Hilton, who is a well-known person, is seen with a lot of
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 around her.
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, that does not mean that they know her personally.
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, I think that there are situations where a person's position on the social ladder is more crucial than their inner traits. In conclusion, many think that someone's worth can be determined by their assets and their status, not by their personality.
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 are ought not to be judged by the previously mentioned criteria.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Materialism
  • Social status
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honor
  • Kindness
  • Integrity
  • Consumerism
  • Superficiality
  • Ephemeral
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Altruism
  • Narcissism
  • Humility
  • Empathy
  • Ethics
  • Moral compass
  • Minimalist
  • Contentment
  • Material possessions
  • Status symbol
  • Wealth disparity
  • Moral bankruptcy
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