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In some countries good school and medical facilities are available in city only. Some people think that teachers and good hospital, education should be provided in rural areas for few years. While some people think that every person is free to do work according to their choice. Discuss your ideas and opinion. Discuss both the sides.

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●Decreased the time execution of Customer’s process flows for four major B2B products (from 105 to 36
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) by analysing the most time-consuming manual parts of these flows, defining problematic automated areas, suggesting a new design and implementing critical fixes. ● Reduced the problem tickets backlog (L3 Level Support) to 60 % and the tickets’ incoming flow to 55% within 6 months by launching the internal weekly cycle for
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 Support Team, educating 3d party vendors and evaluating the existing scope of automated regression cases. ● Designed three e2e Reports to monitor Client’s main KPIs for Mobile, Consumers and Enterprise services and controlled the process of the resolution of issues defined in the scope of reports’ execution. ● Reduced Resources allocated to the project by 30% by defining the approach based on Customers’ critical priorities and organising the internal training to share the knowledge across the team.
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