Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives

Advertising plays a very important role in human life, Many think that advertising can give a positive impact on
people
. In my perspective, I firmly agree with
this
statement . In
this
essay, I shall underpin my belief with
a
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relevant example and ideas.
Firstly
, nowadays
people
do not watch television much since social media become more important in
this
period of time. So, advertising about news can give many benefits because it easy and not take a time to watch. A clear example of
this
is, many do not have time to sit and watch the news on television.so, they will not update about what happening, advertising on social is the solution to
this
problem
moreover
,
people
spend approximately one hour on the street every day due to the traffic jam that a lot of city around the world have to deal with. Advertising on street is other ways to connect with
people
.
Secondly
, advertising can help to improve
about
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marketing because it can make
people
interested in goods.
Moreover
, it can make new jobs for
people
who want to open an online shop
also
people
can easily do shopping online they do not have to gout to a shopping mall.
Moreover
. Advertising can make customers access your goods, It can make many new customers and increase sales To sum up , I firmly believe that advertising can give many benefits to
people
a lot especially on social media and on the street while
people
drive during rush hours because
people
easy see.
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