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For centuries important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree ?

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For several centuries
such
skills
 as reading writing and maths are important things, which are included in the educational system at school in different countries. In the period of modern technologies with the appearance of
computer
 or apps, it has occurred
such
 an idea, what if a
computer
 skill will be added as a fourth skill.
This
 essay will discuss the possible consequences of introducing
computer
skills
 at schools or universities from a different point of views.
Firstly
, I would like to say, that we all live now in 21 centuries, our lifestyle is connected with different devices. Now every employer requires from his workers and a potential candidate has certain knowledge and
skills
 in different software, because it happens often that potential candidates don'
t
 have an imagination how to print a document or person who has a degree of the bachelor and are an engineer,when everyone should be able to work in
such
 programmes as AutoCad, Compas3D e.
t
.c , and as
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consequence pupils or students aren'
t
 completely ready to work in a firm, and
therefore
 the government start to discuss different steps to raise and boost awareness in
computer
 technologies. To exemplify an article, which was published in Guardian in 2012, the government of the UK conducted a survey, according to which 53 per cent of citizens of the UK haven'
t
 a certain knowledge software and
computer
skills
.
On the other hand
, I'm inclined to suppose pupils at an early age can lose the desire to study in regard to the other subjects, and as ,consequence they will spend a lot of time in front of a
computer
. They will play games
instead
 of learning and improving awareness in the field of
computer
 programmes. In conclusion, I would like to say, that it is necessary to introduce
computer
skills
 as a fourth skill because it helps to decline some burdens in the future
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