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Experts believe that, over the next decade, robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Science is moving forward faster than most people can process. Robotics and Artificial Intelligence are a few of the fields that
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 because it can ease the day
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. We could say that Part of a country development can be measure through
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 technological advances and how
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 directly
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. An advantage that stands out of having robots doing human's jobs is the precision level a field can achieve with its tasks on a daily basis.
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, medical procedures done with
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, which would be thousands of times more precise than an expert doctor's hand.
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 on an industrial level, cutting and
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 been optimized by other machines and robots. Another advantage would be the improvement in the
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 with car production.
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 Ford is known to be the
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 car company to introduce the
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 line to their production, making it the
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 company in the USA to produce more cars in less
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. Moving aside all the good it could bring, we must
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 put in a scale the human capital being compromised due to big industries not needing their skills anymore. Nowadays doing the job of
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 we have very impressive machinery that can do the same job being operated just by one
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 the other hand, one of the fears of humanity is that Artificial Intelligence could achieve a level of development that might take decisions of its own and reveal against humans. In conclusion, among all the good things robotics, Artificial Intelligence and technology can bring, we must establish a clear path and goal for our future, so we can combine both human and robots working together, value human capital and work with precision and on
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