Some people say that children should stay at school until the age 18.others suggest the age of 14 is enough .discuss both the views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that education is
one
of the principal parent's concerns, and, nowadays, there is a debate about the correct
age
to finish
school
period. While some people believe that children should stop taking classes at the
age
of fourteen, others take the view that eighteen years is more adequate. In
this
essay, I will discuss both arguments and I will support why I tend to agree with the latter viewpoint with examples. On the
one
hand, it is clear that every pupil has different capacities and targets.
Moreover
, some of them may not have developed academic skills during secondary
school
, and they do not desire to continue with high
school
education.
In addition
, some of them may have family companies, which do not require them to acquire
further
education.
For example
, if
one
student's family own a shop and
this
child wants to attend it, he can stop
school
lessons at the
age
of fourteen.
As a result
, he would start working earlier, and he would learn by training.
On the other hand
,
one
person is considered mature at the
age
of eighteen, when they have enough knowledge to make their own choices.
Furthermore
, during high
school
, young learners develop not only their academic skills but
also
personal skills, which have
a
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crucial importance to choose any future degree or job. To illustrate, the way students approach high
school
classes lead them to follow different paths. If you did not attend these classes, you would not know the reason for your choices. As a consequence, there is
the
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possibility that you can regret
this
decision in the future. To conclude, taking into account both views, I firmly believe that
high
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school
period is a key factor that contributes decisively to young students' future.
Therefore
, it is clear that the more knowledge they obtain, the better judgement they would make.

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