There is no doubt that education is
of the principal parent's concerns, and, nowadays, there is a debate about the correct
period. While some people believe that children should stop taking classes at the
of fourteen, others take the view that eighteen years is more adequate. In
essay, I will discuss both arguments and I will support why I tend to agree with the latter viewpoint with examples.
hand, it is clear that every pupil has different capacities and targets.
, some of them may not have developed academic skills during secondary
, and they do not desire to continue with high
, some of them may have family companies, which do not require them to acquire
student's family own a shop and
child wants to attend it, he can stop
lessons at the
As a result
, he would start working earlier, and he would learn by training.
On the other hand
person is considered mature at the
of eighteen, when they have enough knowledge to make their own choices.
, during high
, young learners develop not only their academic skills but
personal skills, which have
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crucial importance to choose any future degree or job. To illustrate, the way students approach high
classes lead them to follow different paths. If you did not attend these classes, you would not know the reason for your choices. As a consequence, there is
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possibility that you can regret
decision in the future.
To conclude, taking into account both views, I firmly believe that
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period is a key factor that contributes decisively to young students' future.
, it is clear that the more knowledge they obtain, the better judgement they would make.