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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

A growing number of
people
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 prefer to have self-run
businesses
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instead
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 of working for others.
This
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 might be because they can receive all net profits made by their
company
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 and
also
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 they do not like to be dictated.
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, unless the
company
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 made profits,they even may not have a minimum wage. Many young adults tend to run their own
businesses
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 since they think it can help them to achieve their ambitious goal which is earning more.
People
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 are able to earn all net profit when running their own
businesses
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.
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, when a
company
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 make money, its manager receives a total amount of earnings which have left after paying the staff’s salaries.
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, another reason why
people
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 choose to be self-employed is
because
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 they prefer to
work
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 with their own rules , rather than following regulations which are set by other
people
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 .
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,in
this
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way
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,way
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 they are able not to wear uniforms
at
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in
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 their
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work places
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workplaces
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 and
also
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 they can
work
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 whenever they want.
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, having
self-run
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a self-run
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 business might have some drawbacks.
Firstly
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,running a
companiy
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company
 needs a great deal of discipline as
manegers
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managers
 have to meet deadlines. To clarify more,
company
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 owners should
work
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 hard and carry out most of the main tasks themselves in
specific
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 time, which are not only demanding but
also
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 need lots of punctuality.
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, it is possible for companies not to earn profit depending on situations. In
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 situations,managers are deprived of having
stable
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 income which might result in their inability to make ends meet. In conclusion, the growth in the number of
businesses
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 is due to its possible advantages,
such
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 as making more profit m.
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,having
self-run
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a self-run
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bussiness
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business
 needs
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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 responsibilities and
also
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 there
is
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 some threats about lacking money.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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