Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

A growing number of
people
prefer to have self-run
businesses
instead
of working for others.
This
might be because they can receive all net profits made by their
company
and
also
they do not like to be dictated.
However
, unless the
company
made profits,they even may not have a minimum wage. Many young adults tend to run their own
businesses
since they think it can help them to achieve their ambitious goal which is earning more.
People
are able to earn all net profit when running their own
businesses
.
In other words
, when a
company
make money, its manager receives a total amount of earnings which have left after paying the staff’s salaries.
In addition
, another reason why
people
choose to be self-employed is
because
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they prefer to
work
with their own rules , rather than following regulations which are set by other
people
.
For instance
,in
this
way
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they are able not to wear uniforms
at
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their
work places
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workplaces

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and
also
they can
work
whenever they want.
However
, having
self-run
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a self-run

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business might have some drawbacks.
Firstly
,running a
companiy
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company

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needs a great deal of discipline as
manegers
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managers

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have to meet deadlines. To clarify more,
company
owners should
work
hard and carry out most of the main tasks themselves in
specific
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time, which are not only demanding but
also
need lots of punctuality.
Furthermore
, it is possible for companies not to earn profit depending on situations. In
such
situations,managers are deprived of having
stable
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income which might result in their inability to make ends meet. In conclusion, the growth in the number of
businesses
is due to its possible advantages,
such
as making more profit m.
However
,having
self-run
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a self-run

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bussiness
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business

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needs
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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responsibilities and
also
there
is
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some threats about lacking money.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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