You are planning to spend a weekend at a hotel with your family. Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Include the following: – when you want to arrive and leave – explain the type of rooms you would like and ask how much they will cost – ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to let you know that I have a planned vacation scheduled with my family to fly to Hawaii.
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browsing through some options on the internet, we finalized on
accomodating
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accommodating
at your beautiful hotel. We will be arriving on Friday, the
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of July and flying back on Sunday 5th. Considering all the options available on the room types, we concluded the one with two queen beds as
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would meet our needs. As the amenities vary with the price of the room, we want to get the cheapest one available. It would be great if you could provide us with the expense and the availability of the rooms please. Our excitement is at
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peak as
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will be our first time visiting Hawaii and we want to use our time productively exploring all the places around. I would appreciate all the information you could provide on the list of interesting
attraction
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10miles
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10 miles
around the hotel premises. I
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looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours Faithfully, Sheba Kota.
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Grammar & Accuracy
For future reference, remember to proofread for small typographical errors, such as '3th' instead of '3rd','I are' instead of 'We are' and 'accomodating' should be 'accommodating'. These small corrections further refine your writing.
Consistency
Your date format is inconsistent ('Friday, the 3th of July' and 'Sunday 5th'). It's best to maintain a uniform format for clarity, like 'Friday, the 3rd of July' and 'Sunday, the 5th of July'.
Completeness
Consider adding a polite request or query about possible discounts or family packages available, which could make your letter more comprehensive and detailed.
Coherence & Cohesion
The letter has a clear structure, with each paragraph dedicated to a different aspect of the inquiry, which aids in readability and understanding.
Tone
You've maintained an appropriate and respectful tone throughout the letter, suitable for formal correspondence with a hotel.
Task Achievement
You effectively communicated your main inquiries - the type and cost of rooms, and information about activities and places of interest.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accommodation
  • Arrival and departure
  • Sea view
  • Family suite
  • Cost estimate
  • Activities and amenities
  • Water sports
  • Cultural sites
  • Natural attractions
  • Places of interest
  • Confirmation of booking
  • Warm regards
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