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Students should choose a university major that prepares them for a high-paying careers. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

#students #university #careers
Many individuals wanted to study
to
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at
for
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 a famous
university
 just to secure their career in the future. Some find it true
,
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apply
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 because there are companies who look for your educational background and it will help you find a job.
For instance
, when you are a Harvard graduate, many businesses will get you because you came from a well-known school.
Thus
, it will not give assurance to others and will not give them a high salary in their field.
On the other hand
, having a good job with
high
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a high
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 salary, you must be a
hard working
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hard-working
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 person, most
of
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the successful person did not even
went
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go
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 to
university
,
instead
 they persevere to aim their goal and
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dreams, to earn more.
For example
, Jack Ma,
he
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quit going to school and
instead
 work earning a small amount but
then
 because of hard work and perseverance, he is now one of the multi
billionare
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billionaire
 in the world.
Therefore
, having a
university
 major will not give you a good paying salary in your career. To conclude, it is fine to choose a
university
 major that will
helps
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 you in the near future to get a high paying career, but without hard work and
perseverance
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,perseverance
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 you cannot attain these things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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