The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

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These

pie

charts

depict the vital

reasons

for people to immigrate to the UK and the

emigration

from the united

kingdome

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Kingdom

in 2007.

Overall

, there were six different

reasons

for migration. It can be seen that the significant percentage in both

pie

charts

was

difinte

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definite

jobs,

while

the smallest proportion for

immigration

was no

reasons

stated, for

emigration

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,emigration

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the reason was formal study.

According to

what is shown, the ratio of definite

job

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jobs

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immigration

was 30%,

meanwhile

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in the

emigration

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,emigration

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the percentage was 29%.

Moreover

, the

second

motive which

is accompany

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accompanies

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join

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joining

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the percentage was almost the same in both

pie

charts

accounting for 15% to 13%.

In contrast

, there

were

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a massive different number that

represent

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represents

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some

reasons

in the

pie

chart. The formal study proportion was about a quarter

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immigration

whereas

emigration

for the same

reasons

was a tiny fraction. Looking for

job

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a job

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and no reason stated had

same

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the same

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pattern which

were

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was

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in the

immigration

pie

was 12% and 6% but in

emigration

was 22% and 18% respectively.

Also

, the reason

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for

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other had shown

slight

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slightly

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different

number

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numbers

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in both

pie

charts

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