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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
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According to my
opinion
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 its a good idea to teach young people in
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school how they became
a
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goood
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good
 parent. Because
parents
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 are
role
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 model
to
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for
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 the
children
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 to learn
things
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 and became a good person . No doubt
children
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 learn from there
parents
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 some of the
parents
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 are not educated and they
dont
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don't
whats
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what's
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 going on in
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 modern era .
Its
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 hard for them to give correct knowledge about
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new
things
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 . If they are educated they know the wrong
things
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 and they help
there
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children
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 to know the difference between wrong and right .
Secndly
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Secondly
, if they have
knowldge
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knowledge
 about the
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 which
are need
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are needed
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 to be as a good parent like
responsibilties
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responsibilities
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teach
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to teach
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 there kids and help them to avoid wrong decisions. They
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 help
there
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children
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 in
studies
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their studies
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 as well . which helps the
children
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 to
became
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 a good learner and which field of education is good for them in
future
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 . And if the families have
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 skills to help
there
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children
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 . They are good in
future
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 and always be there for them if they get
wrong
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the wrong
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decison
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decision
decisions
 ,They are good to tackle
with
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the problems and help there kid to get a new and
postive
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positive
 decision in
future
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conclussion
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conclusion
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i
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I
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 just wanna say that
parents
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needa
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need
need a
education
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an education
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 to
became
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become
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a
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sucessful
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successful
parents
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 and help
there
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their
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 kids to
became
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become
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a
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good person in life with good and bad experiences . Help them to fight
with
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the problems in
future
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 . Because
one day
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one-day
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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also
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 be a parent to help
there
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their
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 kids and with
this
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lifecircle
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lifecycle
life circle
 is going on with
postivity
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positivity
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