Some educational systems make students study specialised subjects from the age of fifteen while others require students to study a wide range. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some schools prefer
students
to
study
a wide variety of
subjects
after the
age
of
fifteen
whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint, they consider that they should
study
those
subjects
in which they want to settle their career.
Although
knowledge
of every subject is vital, I believe because they have already studied these till the
age
of
fifteen
so it is not crucial to continue it
further
. On the one side, other
subjects
provide basic
knowledge
which is vital for daily
life
. While purchasing something, people need to check the prices of products. They have to examine
that
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whether the billing of the goods
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made correctly.
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, it is
must
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to test if they are not overcharged for anything.
These basic awareness
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is
must
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and taught by other
subjects
.
For example
, Mathematics is the subject
which
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teaches how to make
the
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calculations,
this
is required to be known by the common people. If
this
common
knowledge
is not shared
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teenage
students
, they will face
challanges
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challenges
in their
life
. On the other side, these basic
subjects
are already taught in primary schools. Now after the
age
of
fifteen
,
students
have to choose what they prefer to proceed in
life
as their profession.
In addition
, which
subjects
are required to be learnt for
this
. Rudimentary education is already provided to them,
this
is the
age
of acquiring professional
knowledge
. If
this
is not gained, they may not achieve success in
life
.
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focused
study
will save their
time
and efforts. Their
time
will be utilised in productive tasks only.
For example
, a recent survey state that if
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study
is motivated in
teritary
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tertiary
and senior secondary school, half of the
time
of the
students
will be saved.
Therefore
, focusing on the
subjects
they prefer to excel their
carrer
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career
in will save their
time
because basic education of all the
subjects
is already provided to them in previous classes. In conclusion,
knowledge
of all the
subjects
is paramount to ease the daily
life
but to excel in a
carrer
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career
carrier
focused education is
must
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. In my perspectives, after
fifteen
aim should be on the selective
subjects
only.
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