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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Raising fuel prices is believed to be the best solution to the planet’s environmental problem.
Although
this
 measure may reduce the
amount
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 of toxic fumes that are released into the atmosphere to some extent, I believe there are several more effective alternatives to tackle environmental
issues
. On the one hand,
such
 a policy may help to lower emissions from certain modes of transport. As the price of fuel increases, commuters may resort to using public transport
instead
 of using their own vehicles in order to save money.
Moreover
, drivers who are unwilling to spend more money on petrol will be encouraged to use vehicles that run on renewable and environmentally-friendly energy sources as an alternative,
such
 as electric cars and bicycles. As a consequence, the number of privately-owned vehicles travelling on public roads would be significantly reduced, which in turn would significantly reduce the amount of carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere each year.
This
 would effectively enhance the air quality.
However
, as environmental
issues
 stem from many causes, there are several more suitable ways to address these problems. People’s lack of awareness and knowledge about
such
 problems is one of the primary underlying
issues
 that
results
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 in pollution.
Therefore
, the government must educate the public about the current state of their environment and negative lifestyles in order to reduce the long-term impacts of their ignorance.
Additionally
, water pollution is a severe issue in many developing countries these days and is often found downstream from industrial zones where factories discharge toxic waste without proper treatment.
Such
 an issue requires governments to implement stricter regulations to minimize the negative health impacts and help sustain the economy. In conclusion, since each problem requires a unique solution, it is justifiable to say that increasing the price of fuel is not the single best resolution for environmental
issues
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive use
  • encouraging public transportation
  • sustainable energy sources
  • hydrogen-powered vehicles
  • generate additional revenue
  • environmentally friendly projects
  • disproportionately affects
  • lower-income individuals
  • accessible public transportation options
  • sudden hikes
  • inflation
  • social inequality
  • renewable energy
  • promoting carpooling
  • equitable
  • addressing environmental issues
  • punitive measures
  • sustainable lifestyle
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