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Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think it has made him less social. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #technology #man
Most of the
individuals
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 nowaday's are hook by the new tech and gadgets, they think that it made them more active in socialisation but others disagree. I believe social media has
positive
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the positive
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 and negative effect
of
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 every
person
 and it should
be use
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 in
a
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apply
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proper and
balance
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balanced
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 ways.
To begin
 with, one's a man is actively using his gadgets more often, he could be more sociable.
Technology
 gives a lot of opportunity of knowing
other
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another person
other people
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person
,
for instance
,
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
instagram
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Instagram
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, you can have many
friends
 as much as you want even if they live far or in another country.
Therefore
, it can help someone to be more sociable because of the new
evolve
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 in
technology
.
On the other hand
, others believe that
this
technology
 makes them less sociable especially most if the
person
 wanted to have
a
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physical interaction.
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, most of the young adult born in the year
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, they
wants
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 to have bonding and hangouts in
person
,
active
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an active
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 activity like outdoor games and
then
 the new
technology
 came, they felt less interactive if the
person
 always
face
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 his gadgets
instead
 of personally talking to him.
Thus
,
this
 makes
this
person
 out of place and not having
friends
 in today's generation.
Moreover
, social media and
technology
 introduced us
a
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 lot of things and
makes
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make
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 our life easy, we can
communicate
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 our
friends
 who live far from us or
those family member
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that family member
those family members
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 who work abroad.
However
,
this
technology
 makes
other
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others
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 feel lonely or alone, it gives them anxiety and depression. In conclusion,
technology
 gives
great
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 impact
to
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 everyone's lives, either in
positive
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a positive
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 or negative way, they can have more
friends
 or they can
be feel
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feel
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 alone because of
this
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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