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As compared to the past, children these days spend most of their leisure time indoors with computers and tv and less time outdoors. Describe one of the problems this lack of outdoor leisure time can cause and suggest at least one possible solution

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It is clear that, in recent times, infants are spending their free
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 the house than doing outside activities. While there are many benefits to staying at home, close to an adult, there are
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 some drawbacks to consider. In
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 essay, I will discuss some of the problems associated with the children lockdown and propose some solutions. The most significant problem is the lack of sociability.
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 is an issue because infants prefer using
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computers and mobiles in their free
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 than staying outside, making friends.
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, when I was a child, I used to run in the
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 and have known everyone there; nowadays my cousin lives in the same place and does not know anyone. If it had not been for the endless lockdown, we would not have ended up with
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 an issue. To solve
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 problem, parents should limit the
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 on electronic devices and work hard to enjoy public areas
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 as parks and public pools with their kids.
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, each district could have spaces for parties and activities to do together, in society. Another trouble in children spending more
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 indoors is related to their health.
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 is because as long as infants stare at screens or keep sitting on
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, they are more likely to develop diseases. To illustrate
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 point, researchers have studied the impact of children’s long
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 recluse and have concluded it is frequently associated with problems
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 as myopia, obesity, lack of sleep, emotional illness etc. The solution is to rearrange the routine and do physical activities. As a consequence, families will spend more leisure
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 outdoors, which is crucial to
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 development of their descendants. In conclusion,
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 the factual situation about the past and the present was changed over
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, it does not justify just maintaining the children at home. It is the parents’ responsibility allowing less screen and sharing
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 outside with their offspring.

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